Post by brandonslau on Feb 17, 2008 13:54:36 GMT -5
This is a story I wrote to enter into a writing contest sponsered by a local newpaper. It is not finished, and please do not take fragments or any part of the story and claim it as your own. Don't even copy and paste this off.
Here is the Preistess:
The once was a kingdom in ancient Egypt who was in the need of a special servant, a helper. The were in a time of minor rebuilding from war and the Royal Palace has needed someone to bring about change in their kingdom, The Royal palace wished for peace, riches, prosperity, and luck. The Royal family consisted of the King, the Queen, their newborn son Kij, and the royal servants. The Queen had been going threw some problems. She had been caring for the King who had been sick with a mild fever and uncontrollable vomiting. She had been taking care of him for close to two whole weeks and in her time of sitting with him she thought of all the troubles her kingdom had built up at their time of desperation. They had been raided by a camp of rogues and thieves. Most the villages were destroyed and needed major re-construction. Only a small percentage of the upper class homes were destroyed, but just about everyone was robbed in some way.
So she decided to call her right hand maidens to come into her room to discuss the matter. “What should I do about the kingdom? Everything is slowly falling into pieces.” She knew the king did not like her to associate herself friend wise with lower class people. But she did anyway. the Queen was a friendly person with the kindest heart made of gold. She was also very beautiful and young.
The Queen was only 31 while the King was 10 years older. The three maidens threw out a couple of ideas, such as building walls up or raiding another kingdom to grow in richness. But the Queen was not interested in either of the ideas. Suddenly one idea captured her attention, the younger maiden said “Well we could hire a priestess…she could bring our kingdom great things with her magic!” The Queen approved this idea with great enthusiasm. She paid all of her maidens with 2 gold pieces but the young maiden, Ashara got double gold, plus a new wig. This was greatly appreciated by Ashara.
So the Queen quickly sent out her messenger servant to Greece in search of a priestess whose magic would bring great fortune. The word about this quickly got around. Everyone was excited about this. They all cheered with great joy. The messenger in Greece, reported back to the queen with a message, in his letter he said:
“My Queen, I have done what you asked. The last couple of days I have visited different temples of Isis, the goddess of magic. And found no priestess fit for the job or willing to go. But there is a temple of Isis far east of Athens where one priestess I have heard great things about, her name is Alexandria. She may be the one we need. I have set out to travel to the temple to discuss the matter with her. I will notify you if she confirms positively.
Many blessings,
Khaman.”
She sighed “Very well.”
Three days passed and Khaman the royal messenger finally arrived at the Temple of Isis. He had asked one of the lower Priestess’ about Alexandria; she told him
“She is inside giving thanks to the goddess, unfortunately for you no men are allowed in the temple. You can wait out in the garden and she will be out briefly.”
The messenger sat out in the garden by the pond, he sat on the soft green grass admiring the vegetation the laid before his eyes. After about twenty minutes went by, soon a young woman came out before Khaman, he gave her a strange look and said “You are much too small to be a priestess, you surely aren’t Alexandria…are you?” The young girl said nothing, only silence; she then bowed to him and turned the other way kneeling before a very beautiful woman walking towards his way. She was average sized, she had beautiful grey eyes, long flowing and curly dark brown hair, full lips and strong cheek bones. She was a very curvy woman, not fat but softly structured. She wore a blue and indigo robe that draped over her body hiding most of her physical features. The little girl then bowed to the woman and went back inside. Still in awe by her beauty Khaman managed to make out a sentence “Are…Are you Alexandria?”
The woman gave a great laugh and replied,
“Yes I am Alexandria second hand high priestess of this Temple of Isis.”
“My queen in a kingdom in Egypt has invited you to her royal court, to become the Priestess of the royal palace.” Said Khaman the messenger.
Alexandria replied, “This is my home, I have to stay here with my fellow sisters and take the role of the First hand High Priestess when my time comes.”
“Please we are in need of you. I have heard many great things you have done, many miracles you have worked with you magic. My queen is prepared to offer you a great amount of gold and a nice room to stay in with maids. It will be as if you were treated as a princess.”
“Sir, magic is a miracle it’s self, but if you must beg then I shall speak with the divine above, come back tomorrow I will have your answer. Now leave at once.” She demanded.
The messenger left and went into a nearby town in search of a room to stay in. He knew his time had come to leave very soon because the money the queen had given him for his needs while on his trip was diminishing, and if he had not come back with a priestess, well… let’s say, the queen wouldn’t be too happy to see a servant had spent all the money.
In the meanwhile, the queen had a visitor come to her. The visitor was still at the entrance of the palace and had demanded to see the queen, but the guards would not let her in. Instead one of the guards reported back to the Queen and said
“There is a woman here to see you your highness”
“Who is this woman?” she replied.
“We do not know, she didn’t tell us her name.”
“Well go find out then!” the queen yelled.
Prior to the conversation the guard ran back to the entrance and when he got there he approached the woman and asked “What is your name?”
The woman looked up at the man, uncovering most of her face, her charming cat like hazel eyes shined and left the guards in awe. “My name is Emu.”
The guard slowly walking away still staring at her eyes then finally she turned around and he ran to the queen and told her
“Her name is Emu she says” out of breath from running he leans on a pillar and catches his breath.
“That name, it sounds very familiar. Did she say she knows me?”
“She didn’t say anything of that. But if it helps any, she has unforgettable eyes, they are like these cold hearted cat hazel eyes, it’s like you are lured into a trance and you are hers.”
Remembering something from her childhood, a girl with cat eyes… “Bring her in quickly!!” the queen demanded.
“Do you remember her, my queen” the guard said, but the queen just gave him a hard angry stare, that just screamed the expression NOW!! When the guard arrived at the entrance he made a hand gesture to the other guards and they pulled back off her to the side. “You may come” he said. “Follow me”, as she followed him she began to take off her hood, she had this long flowing black hair with the most flawless skin you will ever see in your lifetime. When they arrived at the queen’s room, the queen saw Emu and soon recognized her. The queen looked at her and said. “It’s been so long since they have taken you, since we met eyes. I have gradually over the years forgotten our memories but not your face. No not that, especially those green bits of your hazel eyes. I see you still put people in a trance with those weapons.”
“It’s been so long since I have seen your, my sister.”
--end of story so far--
tell me what you think of it.
Here is the Preistess:
The once was a kingdom in ancient Egypt who was in the need of a special servant, a helper. The were in a time of minor rebuilding from war and the Royal Palace has needed someone to bring about change in their kingdom, The Royal palace wished for peace, riches, prosperity, and luck. The Royal family consisted of the King, the Queen, their newborn son Kij, and the royal servants. The Queen had been going threw some problems. She had been caring for the King who had been sick with a mild fever and uncontrollable vomiting. She had been taking care of him for close to two whole weeks and in her time of sitting with him she thought of all the troubles her kingdom had built up at their time of desperation. They had been raided by a camp of rogues and thieves. Most the villages were destroyed and needed major re-construction. Only a small percentage of the upper class homes were destroyed, but just about everyone was robbed in some way.
So she decided to call her right hand maidens to come into her room to discuss the matter. “What should I do about the kingdom? Everything is slowly falling into pieces.” She knew the king did not like her to associate herself friend wise with lower class people. But she did anyway. the Queen was a friendly person with the kindest heart made of gold. She was also very beautiful and young.
The Queen was only 31 while the King was 10 years older. The three maidens threw out a couple of ideas, such as building walls up or raiding another kingdom to grow in richness. But the Queen was not interested in either of the ideas. Suddenly one idea captured her attention, the younger maiden said “Well we could hire a priestess…she could bring our kingdom great things with her magic!” The Queen approved this idea with great enthusiasm. She paid all of her maidens with 2 gold pieces but the young maiden, Ashara got double gold, plus a new wig. This was greatly appreciated by Ashara.
So the Queen quickly sent out her messenger servant to Greece in search of a priestess whose magic would bring great fortune. The word about this quickly got around. Everyone was excited about this. They all cheered with great joy. The messenger in Greece, reported back to the queen with a message, in his letter he said:
“My Queen, I have done what you asked. The last couple of days I have visited different temples of Isis, the goddess of magic. And found no priestess fit for the job or willing to go. But there is a temple of Isis far east of Athens where one priestess I have heard great things about, her name is Alexandria. She may be the one we need. I have set out to travel to the temple to discuss the matter with her. I will notify you if she confirms positively.
Many blessings,
Khaman.”
She sighed “Very well.”
Three days passed and Khaman the royal messenger finally arrived at the Temple of Isis. He had asked one of the lower Priestess’ about Alexandria; she told him
“She is inside giving thanks to the goddess, unfortunately for you no men are allowed in the temple. You can wait out in the garden and she will be out briefly.”
The messenger sat out in the garden by the pond, he sat on the soft green grass admiring the vegetation the laid before his eyes. After about twenty minutes went by, soon a young woman came out before Khaman, he gave her a strange look and said “You are much too small to be a priestess, you surely aren’t Alexandria…are you?” The young girl said nothing, only silence; she then bowed to him and turned the other way kneeling before a very beautiful woman walking towards his way. She was average sized, she had beautiful grey eyes, long flowing and curly dark brown hair, full lips and strong cheek bones. She was a very curvy woman, not fat but softly structured. She wore a blue and indigo robe that draped over her body hiding most of her physical features. The little girl then bowed to the woman and went back inside. Still in awe by her beauty Khaman managed to make out a sentence “Are…Are you Alexandria?”
The woman gave a great laugh and replied,
“Yes I am Alexandria second hand high priestess of this Temple of Isis.”
“My queen in a kingdom in Egypt has invited you to her royal court, to become the Priestess of the royal palace.” Said Khaman the messenger.
Alexandria replied, “This is my home, I have to stay here with my fellow sisters and take the role of the First hand High Priestess when my time comes.”
“Please we are in need of you. I have heard many great things you have done, many miracles you have worked with you magic. My queen is prepared to offer you a great amount of gold and a nice room to stay in with maids. It will be as if you were treated as a princess.”
“Sir, magic is a miracle it’s self, but if you must beg then I shall speak with the divine above, come back tomorrow I will have your answer. Now leave at once.” She demanded.
The messenger left and went into a nearby town in search of a room to stay in. He knew his time had come to leave very soon because the money the queen had given him for his needs while on his trip was diminishing, and if he had not come back with a priestess, well… let’s say, the queen wouldn’t be too happy to see a servant had spent all the money.
In the meanwhile, the queen had a visitor come to her. The visitor was still at the entrance of the palace and had demanded to see the queen, but the guards would not let her in. Instead one of the guards reported back to the Queen and said
“There is a woman here to see you your highness”
“Who is this woman?” she replied.
“We do not know, she didn’t tell us her name.”
“Well go find out then!” the queen yelled.
Prior to the conversation the guard ran back to the entrance and when he got there he approached the woman and asked “What is your name?”
The woman looked up at the man, uncovering most of her face, her charming cat like hazel eyes shined and left the guards in awe. “My name is Emu.”
The guard slowly walking away still staring at her eyes then finally she turned around and he ran to the queen and told her
“Her name is Emu she says” out of breath from running he leans on a pillar and catches his breath.
“That name, it sounds very familiar. Did she say she knows me?”
“She didn’t say anything of that. But if it helps any, she has unforgettable eyes, they are like these cold hearted cat hazel eyes, it’s like you are lured into a trance and you are hers.”
Remembering something from her childhood, a girl with cat eyes… “Bring her in quickly!!” the queen demanded.
“Do you remember her, my queen” the guard said, but the queen just gave him a hard angry stare, that just screamed the expression NOW!! When the guard arrived at the entrance he made a hand gesture to the other guards and they pulled back off her to the side. “You may come” he said. “Follow me”, as she followed him she began to take off her hood, she had this long flowing black hair with the most flawless skin you will ever see in your lifetime. When they arrived at the queen’s room, the queen saw Emu and soon recognized her. The queen looked at her and said. “It’s been so long since they have taken you, since we met eyes. I have gradually over the years forgotten our memories but not your face. No not that, especially those green bits of your hazel eyes. I see you still put people in a trance with those weapons.”
“It’s been so long since I have seen your, my sister.”
--end of story so far--
tell me what you think of it.
